Date: 04/16/12 10:18 pm Title: Chapter 2
Wow!This chapter was pretty intense,I feel bad for Jackson.Flying sucks just the thought of getting on a plane makes me panic too and having to be stuck on a plane for a long period of time that is headed somewhere you dont really wanna go to must be hard.
The thing with the phone and A.J.'s music made me cry,everytime I listen to "Sincerely yours" it makes me cry so I can imagine how hard it was for Jackson to listen to when he has so many unresolved and angry feelings toward A.J. and how he has been absent.I do think it is gonna be good to have Rochelle around as a buffer though she seems like she is really trying to help them find some common ground and that,I think,is a very good thing.Anyway,Great job!Can't wait for more!
Date: 04/16/12 09:53 pm Title: Chapter 2
Aww Jackson has the same habit as AJ with swirling his shirt.
Moving on, Jackson has to understand AJ is new at this and starting out he'll be flying by the seat of his pants because he didn't have a father figure growing up either. Also I know Rochelle is being very sweet and wanting to help but at some point she has to let AJ do things for Jackson. The only way he will grow is to be continuelly involved in interaction w/ Jackson.
Jackson has to be more opened to AJ, I know its hard but it doesn't hurt to try. He'll find that underneath AJ's drinking and drugs decisions, AJ is a total sweetheart and very easygoing.
Great Chapter!!
Date: 04/09/12 03:32 am Title: Chapter 1
Great idea for story. I love it so far and can't wait for more.
Author's Response:
Thank you, updated!
Date: 03/30/12 10:32 pm Title: Chapter 1
Pretty good. I'll like to see where this story goes.
Author's Response:
Thanks! I just posted chapter 2. Feel free to leave any constructive criticism.
Date: 03/29/12 03:55 pm Title: Chapter 1
Very nice...I like this story so far! :D
Author's Response:
So glad you do. Chapter 2 is up!
Date: 03/28/12 11:38 pm Title: Chapter 1
I hope both AJ and Jackson realize soon that it's gonna take effort on both their parts not just AJ because he was gone. Both need to do a little "give and take" to help their relationship progress.
Rochelle seems very sweet. I hope she isn't just gonna play mediator between the Mclean boys the whole time.
LOL at Jackson thinking what Rochelle said about decorating his room was cool. He fails to realize Rochelle basically just suggested things that AJ liked or would like and he steadily agreed. He's his father's son more than he realizes right now. Heck his attachment to Denise is like the attachment AJ has to her. But anyways in regards to decorating Rochelle would know, she's the ying to AJ's yang.
Great start!
Author's Response:
Choosing how to portray Rochelle's natural charector was a rough dission as she is so new to the public eye. I was hoping her being sweet would seem believable. Thank you so much for reading. Love your stuff! Check out chapter 2!
Date: 03/28/12 10:49 pm Title: Chapter 1
I feel bad for Jackson. His life hasn't been easy. I hope that he work things out with his dad. I think Rochelle is going to be a person Jackson can count on.
Author's Response:
Yeah, I'm starting to feel like Jackson is real as I write. I actually feel bad for him too. lol! Chapter two is up!
Date: 03/28/12 09:52 pm Title: Chapter 1
I really like this story already,I feel for the kid.I grew up with a crappy father so I know what that can do to a kid but my father never put in the effort to try and fix what he did,I hope that A.J. can fix what went wrong with jackson and they can try to be a normal family.Oh and that comment Rochelle made about A.J. packing the same way made me giggle,For some reason I found that so freakin cute lol. Anyway,Great Job!I can't wait for more!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for reading! Chapter 2 has been posted!
Date: 03/28/12 08:44 pm Title: Prologue
Good start,Can't wait to see where you go with this.Update soon! :)
Author's Response:
Thanks!
Date: 03/28/12 08:25 pm Title: Prologue
A great start. Can't wait for more.
Author's Response:
Thank you!
