Date: 06/23/13 01:03 am Title: The Middle
this is so sweet, loved the little details and Nick dancing with his daughter. You do a great job with the emotions and feelings of a romance story.
Author's Response:
Thanks! I'm glad to hear. :O)
Date: 06/23/13 01:00 am Title: The Beginning
I am so happy to see you writing that I don't care it is romance....by the way the story does not say "complete" on it, i figured I'd let you know. This was really good for a beginning, loved how he was so shy with her but bold enough to ask her out without finding out anything about her first. Very Nick-like.
Author's Response:
Thanks, Tracy. I'll go fix that.
Date: 06/22/13 11:50 pm Title: The Middle
Wow - if I hadn't seen your name on this I never would have believed you'd written it. It's brilliantly written, but quite a change from your usual style! Gone is your signature rolling dialogue though the description is great and quite vivid. Why must you be good at everything? :P
Author's Response:
Hey, thanks! It was hard staying away from my usual dialogue driven ways for this, equally hard to keep my female alive and kicking lol Thanks for reading and the very nice compliments! I feels all special now! :O)
Date: 06/22/13 11:29 pm Title: The Beginning
LMAO! I knew she wasn't going to bite it in the cafe because she's alive as Nick's telling this story to Skylar, but that doesn't mean she won't drop dead of a brain aneurysm or something in the last paragraph. 0:)
Author's Response:
Well, it IS me lol
Date: 06/22/13 11:29 pm Title: The Middle
Really enjoying it. I like that she has her standards when it comes to men, and if they don't meet them, then they are shown the door. Good for her! But I'm glad she heard the music when she danced with Nick :)
Author's Response:
I based her on one of my best friends who is exactly like Shauna in every way, even down t her name...Shauna lmao Thanks, Steph!
Date: 06/22/13 11:22 pm Title: The Middle
Awww! I like that their date started out so awkward and then eased into deeper conversation and eventually dancing LOL. I have to say, the dancing was a little cliche, but I still got goosebumps at this line: "They began to sway to the music that only she could hear and at that moment, 2:07 am, in a small coffee place in the middle of North Jersey, he knew he had met the woman he was going to marry." And the end, when he was dancing with Skylar, almost made me teary-eyed. I'm a sucker for the sappy stuff! So cute!! Post the ending! :)
Author's Response:
LOL I knew I was going over the top cliche with that part. I don't have an ending to post yet, but when I do, I will! I promise. You know she almost bought it in the cafe, right? How easy it would have been to have someone come in and rob the place at gun point. She would get shot in the head, Nick runs for his life and the guys have to resciue him.... Gah! Sunhine and rainbows...sunshine and rainbows....
Date: 06/22/13 11:12 pm Title: The Beginning
aww love this so far..cant wait for more
Author's Response:
Thanks! More has arrived! lol
Date: 06/22/13 11:05 pm Title: The Beginning
Wow, Mare and romance, I never thought I'd see that!!
Sweet story so far though and I'm looking forward to hearing about the coffee shop too.
Author's Response:
I know! Weird huh? lol
Date: 06/22/13 11:05 pm Title: The Beginning
Wow, Mare, color me amazed! This is really cute! It feels so different from your usual stuff, not just because of the genre, but even your writing style seems different. There's more physical description than descriptions of the setting and so on. I guess that's what happens when you write romance, since it's so focused on the characters. It's great, though. I love how you're writing it as a story within a story, set in the context of Nick telling his daughter a bedtime story. That's very cute. I got to the bottom of this chapter and was disappointed when I realized the second one isn't posted yet; I wanted to find out what happened at the coffee shop LOL.
Author's Response:
LOL I'm going to post part two in a minute. :O)
I did find myself having to change my style just a bit to go with the genre since romance does tend to rely a lot more on description than anything else. Thanks, Julie!
