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Reviewer: Alexsgirl_ritz Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/14/13 11:07 am Title: Chapter 4

"He could probably pass himself off as a Carter."

should I take that description seriously? Will Tim be revealed as Nick's long lost half brother or something before the story ends? lol.

I'm glad to tell you that I think I'm getting a hold of this flashback then present scene combination of yours. It's brilliant actually. I just have to read a bit slower or else I need to re-read the whole chapter. :)

Author's Response: Yes! An evil twin, shh! Don't tell anybody though! And yay! I'm glad it's getting easier to follow for you. I don't mind being called brilliant, so feel free to keep that up too! ;O) lmao

Reviewer: RokofAges75 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/12/13 05:03 am Title: Chapter 4

Oh god LOL. I love Tim! He might end up being my favorite original character in a fanfic ever LOL. He is so delightfully creepy and crazy, but not in a cliched crazy way (I laughed out loud so hard at the line about having sex with gophers, btw!). I like that you took the time to give a physical description because it wasn't how I was picturing him, but it makes him more interesting, the fact that he looks and sounds fairly normal when he talks, until you think about what he's actually saying. So creepy!! I like how this chapter kind of flashed back and forth between the scene with Tim and Nick driving to the store and the scene of Tim initially taking Howie and Nick to the cabin so we could see how all that played out. Poor Nick... I'm thinking he's hurt worse than anyone realizes, maybe internal injuries? He might need more than aspirin, which will put Tim in an interesting predicament. God, I love this!

Author's Response:

Oh my GOD! That is like the biggest compliment EVER! That you think Tim is tbe best original character ever because of his creepy and craziness! Thank you SO much for saying that And woot! About the gopher line. You know I had to get some kind of gopher reference in there somewhere! I am usually not big on describing my people (it's always been a weakness of mine) but He needed to be really described because of how nice and normal he looked. The last thing I wanted him to be besides the sterotypical bad guy, was to look like one. The outdoors woodsman who wears jeans and flannel shirts and has the same beard as AJ! Or basically, AJ wearing flannel LMAO And about Nick hrm... could be! "Dont Wanna Lose You Now..." ;O) Thanks for taking the time to read, Julie. I know you're in full fledged school mode so I appreciate it!

Reviewer: Sam_noelle Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/12/13 03:10 am Title: Chapter 4

Dude is messed up, and when they get back and he finds Howie gone... Oh shit, Nick's going to be in trouble. I love that even though Nick is so obviously freaked out, he's still worried about the others first. There's this sudden softer side of him that you've written (Wanting to see Lauren again, worried about the boys, crying). Based on how he's changed personally in the last couple years, the change you've written is pretty spot on to how I imagine he might react in this situation versus when he was younger. If that makes sense. lol

Author's Response: I'm so glad you picked up on that because I really tried to make a conscious effort to grow him up and let all these positive changes he's been through reflect his thoughts and actions. So, yay to that! It's weird you were here reviewing chapter 4 as I was posting chapter 5. LOL Thanks, Sam!

Reviewer: Rose Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/12/13 02:18 am Title: Chapter 4

Tim is so creepy! I love him. Yeah I have issues lol. But his disconnect from reality is so realistic in how you portray him. Poor Nick and Howie, I really enjoy their bond too so I'm glad you had the two of them taken together. :)

Author's Response:

Thanks LOL I'm glad you're loving Tim. I was actually in the middle of writing another creepy Tim scene when I got this review email. You don't know how hard it was for me to NOt have to be Kevin and Nick, but like you, I do enjoy me some Nick and Howie love as well. Thanks, Rose!

Reviewer: brian_fan_4eva Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/12/13 12:06 am Title: Chapter 4

ooh wow....Tim sounds kinda psycho now. Poor Nick and Howie!

Author's Response:

Yup, he's kind of nutso bonkrs! LOL Thanks!! :O)

Reviewer: Carter-Orange Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/11/13 08:35 pm Title: Chapter 4

Oh god, he's like jekyll and hyde a bit isn't he?  I hope he does phone for help and the police track him down to his creepy little cabin!  How can he expect them to forget their lives and be happy with him? Nutter!

Great chapter Mare, really loving this story :)



Author's Response:

Yes, he's kind of an all over the place looney tune! Thanks, Steph! I'm glad you're enjoying it! :O)

Reviewer: Kyrie Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/11/13 06:29 pm Title: Chapter 4

Oh boy! That guy has completely lost touch with reality. I like the part about AJ looking like he belonged in that cabin!



Author's Response:

hehehe thanks! Sad, but true! I wish he would shave that thing! LOL

Reviewer: mamogirl Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/10/13 09:36 pm Title: Chapter 4

Ok. Tim is really creepy. Way creepy. Too much creepy. But... I kinda like him. LOL

Mh... I'm kinda scared for those three still left in the car.

Amazing chapter!

Author's Response:

thanks, Cinzia! We'll be getting to those three next! :O) lol

Reviewer: emily_michele Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/10/13 07:58 pm Title: Chapter 4

Oh man. I have a feeling that once all the adrenaline wears off, Nick's going to be in a lot of trouble.....

Author's Response:

Could very well be. Maybe he can just sexy dance his way out of this! LOL thanks, Emily!

Reviewer: DelphinaCarter Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/10/13 07:54 pm Title: Chapter 4

Oooh this guy is CREEPY. I think once again in Nick fashion he is more hurt than he says and it is really nice to see him trying to help the others. I love Howie being so protective but Tim....well hes 50 shades of LOCO. I hope they can help Brian, Kevin and AJ too. great so far, keep it up!!!

Author's Response:

LMAO fifty shades of loco! I love that! I might have to use that for a future chapter title! Thanks, Tracy!