Reviewer: Bleeding_Soul Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/23/05 04:07 am Title: Chapter 1 - the omega driver

This is interesting so far and I will definitely be reading on but I just want to make one suggestion. Try breaking your paragraphs out a bit it will make it a lot easier for people to read. I also couldn't help but notice you have a few spelling errors. But I like it, so keep writing it.

Author's Response: will this is my first story. Really thank you for the input, I will try to do better on the next chapters, still need more work on the plot it self, this story has a lot in it, love hate envy betrail but im just warming up, will thanks again hope to read some of your stuff as well