Reviewer: DelphinaCarter Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/25/13 01:49 am Title: Chapter 44

Awww Nick and Patty ended up together!!! I love happy endings...and how AJ became a fire cheif with kids of his own, Howie being in a new relationship. I love these little details and I am sad this is over but I will be starting on Shadow Woods next. Great job as always Mare :)

Author's Response:

Right? See, occasionally I can do happy endings! And notice too that both Patty and Tracy lived throughout the entire story! :O) LOL Thanks so much for reading this. I'm going to miss getting all the reviews from you. I have been spoiled lately after a year of almost nothing! I hope you start reading Shadow Woods, like tomorrow! lmao Thanks again, Tracy! :O)

Reviewer: emily_michele Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/17/13 01:31 am Title: Chapter 44

Excellent way to end it!  With me finally being right about something in this story! LOL  Well, I had this long, thoughtful final review in my head when I actually finished reading this before I left for work this morning, and my little boy found it appropriate to confiscate my laptop so that he could watch Power Ramgers on Netflix.  Never mind that there was a big flat screen television he could watch them on instead....

Anyway, looking back over this story, I liked that it kept me guessing a little more than the last one, and I think the Ariana story line was a really interesting one.  I would have liked to hear more of Kevin Sr.'s side of the story, and I'm still not sure we ever got the scoop on exactly why Kevin Sr. went into witness protection?  Was it running from Ariana?  Then, how did she end up working at the station?  Also, you're right in that I don't think there was ever a really clear explanation of the link between Ariana and the baby killer case, and how that all related to Dad going into witness protection.  In my head, I'm thinking maybe Jack was the link?  Like, Jack was her boyfriend, and he was involved with the Scott Wilson and Patty's dad (his name escapes me at the moment), so Ariana found a way to have Nick kidnapped and make it look related to that case.  Or was there a stronger link than that that I'm missing or forgetting?  Overall, I think both stories could actually stand alone, other than having Ariana kill Jackie at the end of the last one, and I think that's part of what makes them great.  As is the case with most sequels, I did like the other one better.  Maybe it's more because you set the tone with that one more than anything.  That being said, if I'd read this one first without having read To Protect and Serve first, it would still be one of the best pieces of fanfic I've read so far!  I've really enjoyed this, Mare!  perhaps I'm going to have to pick up another one of your stories soon.  I actually haven't read a large portion of your stories.

Author's Response:

Yup, you knew he would end up joining the FBI in the end! Kudos for that! But most importantly Stacy lived through the entire story AND Kevin, Howie and Nick all also ended up with living girlfriends! lol

In the OF version, if I get around to this one, lot's of things would change and one of them is to really explore more of Kevin Sr's past. Give him some flashback scenes leading up to that night he needed to go into witness protection and what happened. I never really explained it because I never really thought it through all that much to be honest. I just needed a reason for dad to be gone where everyone thought he was dead. I shouldhave explained that in Protect and serve but never did. It will be explained in the OF version. I didn't really form Dad's character as solidly as I wanted to because in all honesty I kept playing with the the idea of killing him off throughout this story. I was afriad to do that though because I didn't want to take away from some of the other stuff going on. I felt like it would have been a little too much drama, if that makes sense?

Jack was in on the baby killings. That was another thing that didn't play out the way I wanted it to. But you are right when it comes to Ariana hooking up with him to convince John to kidnap Nick. I think that was Patty's dad's name lol I don't remember either but since John is my dad's name and I was Patty, I bet it was! John really was the baby killer but Ariana had an active part. There was a small flashback scene where Nick kind of brings her into a memory but again, in retrospect, I should have made a bigger deal out of it. Like I said, I was running out of patience when writing this one and just started rushing to finish it. I believe I had let about 2 years lapse between chapters 36 and 37! Talk about mean cliffies!

Thanks so much for reading this and all the insight you've given me along the way! I am so glad you enjoyed both of them and I'm completely flattered that you think it's one of the best things fanfic wise you've read. I always looked forward to getting your feedback because I knew you would be helpful and honest. I do look forward to finding you reading something else soon! They aren't all disturbing psycho dramas, I promise...but most of them are! LMAO Thanks again, Emily!

Reviewer: waj Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/03/10 06:17 pm Title: Chapter 44

Awwwwww!! *sobs* Its over. I cant believe I didnt know this was finished. Thank you so much Mare. This was a great series.

Reviewer: mersey Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/24/10 10:16 am Title: Chapter 44

ok, how SWEET is this chapter? it's so schmoopy i crave candieeessss

i love how you wrap up each characters' lives and im glad you saved Patty :D and it's awesome that you made brian me the one who is scared of commitment and AJ with two kids awwww....and Howie, finally finding the right person and Kevin with his Selma and the relationship between Nick and Kevin Sr is made of so much win! and Nick, so mature and GROWN and i still see him as the young kid...Patty is one lucky lady!

yay for you completing this fic mare, so proud of you!

Author's Response: YAY!! I'm proud of me too! LOL schmoopy. You're too cute! Thanks for reading it and sorry for making you a psycho! :OP

Reviewer: mandelyn78753 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/22/10 03:24 pm Title: Chapter 44

Oh wow... it's finally over? I love happy endings :)

hehe

 

This story was awesome. I hope there's eventually more..... like a sequal. I want to see the guys in action as FBI agents! That would be so awesome.

 

Wonderful work. Devoted fan right here ;)

Author's Response:

Thanks for reading mandelyn. I doubt there will be more with this series, but I appreciate you taking the time to read and stick with it! :O)

Reviewer: Sam_noelle Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/22/10 08:33 am Title: Chapter 44

Aww, it's so bittersweet. For real though, I do appreciate you coming back to this one and really putting in an effort to finish it for your readers, I think that's awesome. As far as the last chapter, I had a feeling that it was going to be Howie that would have to do the deed, as bad as this sounds, it just felt right that it ended that way.lol And AJ saves the day? I think fiction might be the only time that would actually happen, but it made for a good/sentimental action sequence. I heart BSB brotherly love. I'm also happy that we saw Nick and his father finally come together to understand each other. I was surprised about the graduation from the Academy twist, but he did basically figure out the Ariana stuff on his own, so it makes sense.

Call me an idiot but I didn't make the connection with the girls names until I read "Sel". I was thinking, aw she gave a shout out to Sel, I wonder if I'll see my name in here...yeah skipped over it. lmao I'm an idiot. Maybe I'm quick to assume, but I'm just going to say Samantha was me and thanks for the shout out. I'm not a Howie fan, but I have always liked Seattle. lmao Thanks again Mare, can't wait for current and future stories to come!

Author's Response:

LOL aww poor Howie, Well at least I didn't make you the psycho Howie wife like I did to poor Mersey. I can't even tell you how close I came to breaking my own rule about not killing the BSB because I almost made Ariana shoot Howie instead and I thought about letting him die. (sorry Howie) but then I figured if anyone deserved to kill her, it would be him. I'm glad I went that way with it. I always knew I was going to end it the same way I started it with them all around her grave and I was also pretty sure I was going to have Nick do something in civil service. I just kept going back and forth between fireman and detective. Thanks for reading and supporting this story for such a long time! I promise I won't leave any other stories hanging for quite as long! Even though updates miught not always be as frequent as they are right now. :O)