Reviewer: xKiKix Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 02/20/07 04:33 am Title: Chapter 3: Hollywood Knights

hey you finally updated... i hope kellie and aaron will finally have sex.... lol... i know i'm a creep... a haha...

Author's Response: they will it'll be coming up in the next few chapters i promise

Reviewer: Jamie Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 02/12/07 11:42 pm Title: Chapter 2: Happy New Years

Awww... this chapter was really cute! I loved it :-D

Author's Response: heh thankee!

Reviewer: xKiKix Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 02/12/07 01:00 pm Title: Chapter 2: Happy New Years

i cant believe that you actually updated this series.. lol.. i've been reaing swib... and i cant believe that kellie and aaron broke up... please make them fall in love again.... lol...

Author's Response: yeah I'm hopefully going to be updating it alot more i need to get caught up so you can find out WHY they broke up

Reviewer: piethush Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 01/09/07 05:15 pm Title: Prologue: Pick Up Lines

Wow, I love this story. Please update when you can.

Author's Response: Thank you! I hope to update as soon as inspiration strikes. And really ur feedback is so appreciated.

Reviewer: presley Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/08/07 10:13 am Title: Chapter 1: First Date

Again LOVE it!!!been waiting on this update!! luff ya!

Author's Response: thought you would. i can only hope i can pull aaron off well lol.

Reviewer: Kelly Signed [Report This]
Date: 10/25/06 09:28 am Title: Prologue: Pick Up Lines

very interesting!

Author's Response: thanks hon! I am working on it and everything else its just super hard to find time to write ya know?

Reviewer: suzanne Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/29/06 08:25 am Title: Prologue: Pick Up Lines

Good beginning.

I would have had Aaron getting freaky on the dance floor with some chick and Kellie going over their and interupt them thinking she was busting Nick for cheating on her best friend only to see this really hot younger guy that looks like Nick.

Then I would have had Kellie say something to Aaron like I am sorry for inturupting but you looked like my bestfriends boyfriend Nick. While she is saying she is sorry she is checking Aaron out.

Then have Aaron say please don't say Nick Carter and then Kellie says yeah why not into boy band music? Aaron laughs then says no its not that I am his brother and people are always compairing us and I really, really hated being compared to him.Then have Aaron introduce the girl he was dancing with as one of his friends he is out with tonight.

Then have Kellie say something like it was nice meeting you Aaron and whoever and turn to leave then Aaron could grab her arm and say wait would you like to join us in the VIP area. Kellie says sure I am done with my shift anyway let me just clock out and I will meet you in the VIP area. While Kellie is walking away Aaron checks her out.

Then later while they are talking up in the VIP area is when they ask each other how old they are and then have Kellie make the joke about prom.

I would have made Kellie play harder to get.

I know I am sounding really critical of your story and I guess I am but I do truely like it so far.

Author's Response: hehe that's okay constructive criticism is totally welcome! The reason why I didn't have Kellie do the whole 'you look like my best friend's boyfriend' is because she knows Aaron from hanging out with Alyssa and Nick. And Kellie is so going to play hard to get, especially on the first date when he's expecting to get an invitation into her apartment. If they'd never met before he asked her out I would have totally done what you suggested. But anywhoo thank you so much for your suggestions! And of course I'm glad you like it!