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Reviewer: Sakabelle Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/12/08 08:46 pm Title: Chapter 3

Yeah, no wonder Nick is annoyed! I mean the poor guy was up all night and no one bothered to call him and tell him what they knew. Jeez. And I can only imagine what Kevin is going through, shitty deal. I can totally picture him pacing around like that. I'm glad Brian's parents finally arrived, I hope they are able to see Brian soon. Great chapter, hun!

Author's Response: I think Nick reacted rather mildly compared to how I would have reacted, but to everyone their own. Thanks for the review! [Ashley]

Reviewer: luna610 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/09/08 09:29 am Title: Chapter 3

You do such a great job capturing the guys' grief...especially Kevin.

Author's Response: It's a bit difficult without making it sound redundant, but I think capturing everyone's emotions is a very important aspect of the story. Brian may be the main one who is affected by this, but everyone else is also effected in some way. Thanks for the review! [Ashley]

Reviewer: rebellious_one Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/30/08 05:38 am Title: Chapter 3

Oh wow... this is just the second chapter, and I find it EXTREMEMLY emotional, =[ I can't imagine how it must feel to be the bearer of bad news... poor Kevin. And I'm sorry, but I kinda laughed in the beginning, with the interaction between Nick and Baylee... Nick seems like the type to go up and up with a toddler, lol. But, back the the seriousness... I really enjoy your choice of words and description. I may only be on the second chapter, but the story is very vivid, and I like how you delve into each guys' feelings and what stems from it. Man oh man... I'm already emotional on the second chapter, but here I go, onto chapter 3. =]



Author's Response:

It's been rather difficult to delve into each of their minds because of the emotional aspect of it, but it's vital for the story. Yes, Brian is the main character and yes, everything bad is happening to him, but he is not the only one affected by all of it. Everyone else in his life is affected by what is going on in their own individual ways. Without expressing the sub characters inner emotions and reactions, I think the story would lack much needed support and frankly it would get old, boring, and lose all life.

I know the scene between Nick and Baylee at the beginning of this chapter may have seemed a tad bit cliche, however, it was a major reflection on my own personal characteristics and personality. I don't deal well with drama so I try to find or create humor to make up for what it currently going on. Plus, I hate hospitals. But I thought that little scene worked nicely and it paved a path for the next scenes.

Sometimes I think I'm rather anal when it comes to descriptiveness but that in my opinion is one of the most vital aspects of a story, otherwise it lacks life and interest. But the general consensus has told me so far that I am succeeding with my descriptions and the way I am working out the emotions.

Glad to know you are still enjoying this and thanks for the review hon! My PR so totally rocks! [Ashley]

Reviewer: luci Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 09/28/07 07:14 am Title: Chapter 3

aw baylee is cute

Author's Response: Wow, didn't realize how much reading you had to catch up on. Kids are cute in general. Duh! LoL. [Ashley]

Reviewer: sweet18_2003 Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 03/25/07 10:29 pm Title: Chapter 3

Wow...what a blow. Although how else was Kevn supposed to tell Brian's parents that their son is dying. Baylee is so adorable though! Poor little guy. Hopefully when he sees his daddy, they're gentle with him. Awesome chapter. Update soon!

Author's Response: I imagine it would be tough being in Kevin's position. Baylee is adorable. And I'm thinking of letting him see his daddy soon. Thanks for the review. [Ashley]

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 03/24/07 01:15 pm Title: Chapter 3

What a tearjerker!
Made me cry.
Man, I was wondering when Jackie and Harold would get there.
Poor Baylee got yelled at :P
Well, anyways, you're doing good. Lots of angst
Update soon

Author's Response: I'm trying to make it a tearjerker. Guess it's working? LoL. Glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for the review and keep checking back for updates! [Ashley]

Reviewer: Veronica Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 03/24/07 09:27 am Title: Chapter 3

I know this is such a sad moment but I should really slap Kev in the back of the head for snapping at Baylee. Ohhh crap, the family is there... the next chapter is gonna be extra sad, isn't it? Loved it and I can't wait to read more.

Author's Response: Emotions tend to take over a person's logic during rough times. Kevin shouldn't have snapped, but you can't blame him. I do believe the next chap will be somewhat of an emotional and trying chap. Thanks for the review! Keep checking back for updates! [Ashley]

Reviewer: Lynn Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 03/24/07 06:52 am Title: Chapter 3

Aww. You've GOT to keep writing this.

Bri Bri...and his poor family!!! AAAH!

Author's Response: Heh...well, we've already discussed all this so I'm not even going to say anything. Thanks for the review though! You know I will keep writing! [Ashley]

Reviewer: LenniluvsBrian Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 03/24/07 05:56 am Title: Chapter 3

Oye vey! If I weren't on such a TMNT high, I would have cried! You can NOT let Brian die!!!!! DUE A HEART TRANSPLANT PEOPLE!!!!!!!!!

UPDATE!!!!!!!!!

~Lenni~

Author's Response: Ah, Lenni...you don't have to not be on a TMNT high in order to cry. Thanks for the review! I really appreciate it! [Ashley]