|
0 |
Alias: balance [Contact] |
Real Name: Pam Hollmon |
|
User Level: Member |
||
|
Member since: 12/07/03 |
Last logged in: |
|
|
Skin: |
||
|
0 |
|
|
|
0 |
Website |
|
Messengers |
|
|
Favorite TV Shows |
One is lost
One is broken
One is a prisoner
Two are trapped
Mare,
Glad you got your mojo back! You have this uncanny ability in creating creepy villiams which appear to be normal.(Trish from the Bible trilogy and Ariana in "Scars") I'm still unsure of my feelings about Tim.....granted, he did kidnap Howie and Nick, but his isolation has warped him.
His remark about Howie looking out for Nick I thought was ironic considering baby bro wanted to come with Howie to look out for him and to get help for the others. (Maybe one day Nick will finally accept that he will always be the baby and the others will always see him at a certain age....atleast, that's what my baby sister says! I'm 16 years older than she is and she's right to a certain extent.)
Like the cliffie at the end....will he or won't he send help for the others? Again, great start Mare. I look forward to reading more. However, my reviews will be a little erratic....we return to school this week!
Pammy
Author's Response:
Thanks, Pammy! I wish I had the spark to start this story at the beginning of the summer and not the end lol I think you hit the nail right on the head about Nick and how the other's percieve him as opposed to maybe how he sees himself, although I do think he enjoys his role as the baby quite a bit. LOL And thanks for the compliments about my villians. I really try to make them human and not totally handle bar moustache bad guys. There is a reason they act the way they do and it's usually not entirely their fault.
Good luck with the start of school and just read when you can. I'm doing things different and pretty much posting a chapter a day so it'll be here waiting for you. Nice to see you reading my stuff again! :O)
Oh Mare,
I feel so bad! I've been reading but not reviewing....bad Pammy! As for Tim...I didn't want to care about him, but I did. He was a product of his environment and was essentially choiceless, except when it came to the Boys. I'm glad that he now understands what he did was wrong and is truly remorseful. I'm not surprised that it was Kevin to visit Tim...it seems like a "Kevin thing." I'm not sure I could do it if I was in his situation. I also couldn't see Howie doing it. His testimony at Tim's trial of not killing Tim was a little frightening. Definite a change to out Howie. Now Mare, did you kill our Nick again? I'm not surprised that Tim had the hardest time thinking of Nick and writing a letter to him. Nick was the one he spent more time with....and the one who "saved" him. As I have been reading this story, I keep going back to the argument of "nature vs. nurture." And here's the kicker, I'm still not sure which side created Tim.
Once again Mare, I'm awed by your prose!
Pammy Whammy
Author's Response: Thanks, Pammy. I think when something like this happens, people are bound to change as a result like Howie and Brian. Do you think I could kill Nick twice? lol I'm still not sure which one Tim falls under and I created him. He's an enigma even to me! I'm glad you enjoyed this one! Thanks for dropping in and letting me know!
Loved the ending, Mare. A small part of me wants to know what Tim said to Nick in his letter; but I really love Nick's response: “I’m not giving him the satisfaction of having the last word and I certainly am not going to be his hostage anymore.” Yeah Nick!!! I'm not really surprise by Howie's marital problems, his guilt seemed to be swallowing him up. I'm glad Nick could help him....I've been loving that SweetKaos relationship lately. (And you know that's HUGE for this Kevin/Nick girl!)I think Brian's anger was a reflection of his helplessness. However, I thought his faith would suffer more....but I guess that's where the spiritual advisor helped.
Once again, Mare, super job! You always impress me with your talent!
Pammy Whammy
Author's Response: I was originally going to have Nick read the letter but I decided that he wouldn't really want to. I love Nick and Howie's relationship as well! Actually the three of them together really makes me happy! LOL Thanks so much for all the kind words, Pammy! I appreciate it! :O)
Great story, Mare! I loved the "flashbacks" of the other Boys. When Brian grips his wife's hand, I thought it not only symbolized the strength of their marriage, but also the strength of his friendship with Nick. I wasn't sure Nick would have any of the Boys as groomsmen...but I wasn't surprise it was Howie. The Howie/Nick friendship has never been in your face like Frick-and-Frack, but has always, in my opinion, been a strong one.
“I know that sounds stupid but…I just wanted you all to be my family.” - This was sad, but so realistic. And I am so looking forward to seeing Ava waddle down the aisle. Reports say she was as cute as a button! And finally Kevin! When reading articles about the wedding, I never read that Kevin was at the wedding and only a mention that he was at the reception. I couldn't believe that Kevin, Mr. Protective, would miss Nick's wedding. I'm glad he was there. A few rows back and just to the left was Kevin Richardson. He was holding the hand of his wife as tears steadily streamed down his face. “You’re a mess and the ceremony hasn’t even started yet. Am I going to have to scrape you off the floor after this?” - I laughed out loud because I can so see this happening.
Once again, Mare, your insightful nature truly makes the story realistic.
Pammy Whammy
Author's Response: I wasn't surprised it was Howie either. I was really happy to see that actually. I admit I was really disturbed by the thought of Kevin possibly not being at the wedding and then just elated to hear he was there and that they all gave heartfelt toasts as well. Thanks for the review, Pammy! I always enjoy reading what you have to say. :O)
I see Kevin's dream as his insecurities. He wants to help Nick but he doesn't know how.
Now, Bob Carter has always bothered me...well annoyed me would probably be a better word. We all know Jane Carter is the stage mom from Hell; but what about Bob? He's always the "innocent" while Jane is the "bad guy." "Jane gave that story about Nick and his girlfriend to the Enquirer." "Jane took Aaron money." What the heck was he doing while Jane was doing all this?! I always see him as the guy who has the title "Father" but never performs the actions of a father. Okay, rant is over!
Another good update, Mare. Looking forward to next week.
Pammy Whammy
Author's Response: Bob has always bothered me as well. I don't think either of Nick's parents did a bang up job at raising their kids and that's heartbreaking. I hope he's wasn't abusive but just from reading Nick's book, I get the impression that he was scared of his father. I'm glad Nick made the decision to take them both out of his life. Thanks, Pammy!
This was nice. "Seeing" the guys have some fun during downtime and seeing Nick happy. I love the way you wrote the "fun" time and contrasted it with the "dark" conversations Howie and Kevin were having.
And yet, I knew the day was going to well! And although we don't know who the man is, I'm with Kevin and Howie and going to suspect the worst.
Great update, Mare, and mean cliffie! Have a great vacation. While you're on vacation, I'll be going back to my classroom the get my lab ready for registration in two weeks.
Pammy
Author's Response: Ugh! I can't believe it's already time for that! Seems like school starts earlier and earlier! And thanks for the compliment. I tried really hard to do a light and dark thing throughout the entire chapter ending with the darkest place possible! Sorry about the cliffy! I didn't want anyone to see it coming. I hope it worked. LOL Thanks, Pammy!
At first, I was going to wait until this story was complete, because it was already on chappie 6 when I started to read it, before I left a review. But, changed my mind.
Anyway, a Kevin/Nick story....you have my attention...add some Sweet D, I'm looking forward to seeing the dynamics.....and a baby Nick(18 and younger)....I haven't read one of those in a while.
Kevin rolled his eyes. He really needed to get away from the guys for a bit, especially that one. Nick just drove him crazy. Every little thing the fifteen year old did got on his nerves, especially these days. He actually had a dream about strangling him the other night. He woke up smiling. - OMG, I've had days like this!
“Kevin, how awful you felt just now, is how Nick always feels when his parents do this to him and he’s just a kid.” He paused for a second to make sure what he had said sunk in, “Just some food for thought.” - And this is how we do it! I can so picture this....no yelling or screaming, just the facts to make someone feel somewhat ashamed for their behavior.
I saw an interview with the Boys, on the last cruise, I think. The question asked was there anyone in the group you didn't get along with when the group formed. Kevin answered Nick because of the age difference, but he loves the "little shit." I hope to see this transition in this story.
Pammy
Author's Response: Hey Pammy! :O) That interview you are talking about and the answer to that question is what actually inspired this story. I got to thinking about their complex relationship and wondered why and how it changed and this story was born. LOL
I think we've all had days like that where strangling someone would be a welcome thing! And I'm glad you liked that Howie line. His lines are some of my favorites in this story. Wise D.
Poor Howie....he's the rose between two thorns! And what was the meeting with Johnny about?
Pammy
Author's Response: Yes, he certainly is and you will see! LOL
“I had a hard time getting comfortable in that bed. The mattress is so hard.” - When I read this, my first thought was what a brat!
But when I got to this line, Howie simply said, “Sometimes the biggest bruises are the ones we can’t actually see.”- I had to remind myself that sometime there are reasons for certain behaviors.
You're making me think, Mare.
Author's Response: aww yay! Thinking is always a good thing! :O) Thanks, Pammy!
It is so strange to see a Kevin so unsure of himself in his dealing with Nick. This is seems very realistic, Mare. After all, the Nick/Kevin bromance didn't develop overnight!
And I love Howie's prominence in this story. Not over the top, not center of attention, but subtle, a lot like Howie himself. Kudos, Mare.
And a cliffie!!!!! Oh no!
Pammy
Author's Response: Well, you know I had to have at least a few cliffies in this one! Even if it's not really a suspense. LOL And thank you for the Howie compliment. I really am enjoying writing him in this one.
Nick has a stalker! And it's a relative. I'm with Kevin....how can his parents not be with him at a time like this?
“I may have farted on your pizza when you weren’t paying attention.” - And what do you say to a line like that?! Great line, Mare, and so unexpected.
Pammy
Author's Response: That line about the farting on the pizza came out of nowhere so I went with it. lol random but yet very Nick.
“But he’s not which is why YOU are here, isn’t it?” - I knew he was going to say it! Again, very realistic.
And Mare, I didn't think that was cheesy...a little heartbreaking, though. No child should ever feel unwanted.
And if we keep getting these terrific little scenes, I hope you never go fishing.
Pammy
Author's Response: Thanks, Pammy. I'm glad you didn't think it was cheesy. That's something I've really been struggling with for this story. Trying not to be over the top cheesy because of all the Kevin consoling that has to happen. I figure it was a lot of trial and error with those two,I just don't want to get too repetitive with Kevin saying something to make Nick mad and then a cheesy forgive me scene to follow. LOL and it is heartbreaking but sadly, I wouldn't be the least bit surprised if he really felt like that about his parents. :(
Hmmmm....what do the Carters want? I know it can't be anything good!
“Because I don’t know man…your brows just kind of like… do the talking for you.” - LOL
You're doing a great job with this story, Mare.
Pammy
Author's Response: LOL thanks, Pammy!
Awwwe....there's the Kevin I'm use to. The protective big brother is finally emerging. And I've finally caught up!
Looking forward to the next chappie, Mare.
Pammy
Author's Response: Yup, here he comes! Thanks, Pammy!! :O)I always look forward to getting your opinions!
Wow! Mare, you did a great job in building the suspense. Kevin's increasing panic and his epiphany in realizing that, yes, Nick is my brother, was really well written.
I'm on the edge of my seat!
Pammy Whammy
Author's Response: Thanks, Pammy! :O)
Affiliates
Want to be an affiliate with Absolute Chaos? Email: mods@absolutechaos.net
Disclaimers (i.e. covering legal butts): All fiction is copyright to the individual writers. Do not copy in whole or in part. All trademarks belong to their respective owners (including but not limited to: Warner Brothers, JK Rowling, Fox Television, Jive). The stories here are intended as entertainment only and are not to be implied as true in any way shape or form. Characters that resemble real people are fictional versions of those people. No harm is intended.